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My town

simon 1982

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this is a first person zombie apocalypse

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#2 in Post-apocalyptic


Ongoing: 21 Aug 47 pages

Publication: 22.07.2019 — ...


Description of the story "My town "

This is a first person story about what Sid would do if zombies took over his town

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Angel Lederhouse 19.08.2019, 18:14:14

great concept, slow updates

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simon 1982 19.08.2019, 18:51:44

Hi thanks for your feedback I only do short chapters so it might not always appear in your updated list I am trying to do two chapters a week due to work commitments I hope you can stick with me to the end and that you like what you read

Litnet Authors 17.08.2019, 22:23:25

Love the new cover, Simon.

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Litnet Authors 17.08.2019, 22:55:03

simon 1982, It's awesome.

Roza Csergo 12.08.2019, 12:05:53

Your prose is getting better. I like the diversity of the paragraphs. May I give another unsolicited tip? Each dialogue line should start with a capital letter.

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simon 1982 12.08.2019, 12:13:43

Thank you that is another tip I will use I hope you are enjoying it

Mike Two 07.08.2019, 11:14:13

Good storyline despite the poor grammar

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Mike Two 07.08.2019, 17:32:37

simon 1982, I don't publish anything, only read

Roza Csergo 31.07.2019, 12:11:14

There's so much improvement in the second chapter. I think you're starting to get the hang of creating sentences. The only thing that I could suggest doing is putting each line of dialogue in quotation mark ("..."). For example
"See you tonight? "
"Sure. At what time?"

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simon 1982 01.08.2019, 11:39:55

Roza Csergo, Thanks for the encouragement I will it will take time I know I was going to try and make this one book but the way the ideas keep coming I think it might end up a series I have not written since junior school when I entered a competition and won it was nothing big but it got published in a book for schools. That was before teachers had started to get annoyed with my bad work. But now I have so many stories I think it is about time I wrote them down to see if people like them im under no elution that I will ever make any money from them I just want to entertain people

Brad Emshwiller 31.07.2019, 16:00:32

Despite errors, it paces well. Reminds me a bit of John Dies at the End. But you have some work ahead of you. Keep writing. And don’t be too hasty to click the publish button. Go over it again. And again. And then once more to be sure. Putting it down once is only the start. Editing and rewriting are musts. But keep it up

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simon 1982 31.07.2019, 21:55:49

I think I will have a watch of the film and a read thanks

Jake A. Strife 27.07.2019, 03:30:07

You have imagination, which is great starting point, but you need style and to work on your grammar. Periods, quotations, etc. Maybe pick up a book on grammar or a take a course. You've got a ways to go, but the journey of a thousand miles starts with the first step. I wish you the best of luck and thank you for reading Omega Virus.

Work your butt off. That's the only way to succeed as a writer.

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simon 1982 27.07.2019, 10:59:31

Thank you for reading it I will keep on with it and see how it goes maybe by the end it will get better

K.R Webber 25.07.2019, 13:51:33

Try using merging multiple fragmented sentences into one. Avoid using THAT and LY words. Your idea has potential but needs writing style. I have nothing negative against your imagination. The idea is good.
PS: Don't forget to check my books as well. your suggestion will be appreciated.

Roza Csergo 24.07.2019, 00:50:09

Hi. I don't want to sound rude but may I suggest dividing this one huge paragraph into a smaller one?
Also, would you consider adding some punctuation marks, like commas and periods (full stop)?
Different length sentences would make it a lot easier to follow the storyline.
Happy writing :-)

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simon 1982 25.07.2019, 12:44:51

Roza Csergo, Thank you I will try that it's all good advice

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