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Book: This isn't Goodbye by author Goodness
Participants: Ruechari, Jessica Wright, Atul Saini, Roza Csergo, AnnaRCase, Veronica Lawson, Vijay Kumar Kerji, Marilyn Lucero, and Devine Iternal
Dr. Jeremy is one of the best doctors that people know, when treating his patients, he goes all in to make sure they survive, one day he was told that a new patient signed herself to him and left to meet her in her room and only to find out that she was his highschool love but he never got a chance to confess to her due to the fact he was so busy running around for his doctor career and now sickness has brought them together again, he told himself that he will do his best to make sure she is well again but when he was handed her report, he found out that she was suffering from leukemia and has only but six months to live.
You already know I love this story as I have given it a silver feather way before your story was even selected for a review. It is not often I find a true romance story and when I do I can’t help but get excited about it. “This Isn’t Goodbye” has a great storyline, with the characters you become invested in almost immediately.
Trixie’s bravery and acceptance of her situation is an inspiration. To be going through such a trial and to realize you may be coming to an end is probably the hardest truth anyone has to face and she does it with such grace.
Kate, her strength and support of her friend, her care and concern is very touching. However, it’s her personality and ability to smack you in the face with the truth that I love most about her character.
You couldn’t ask for a better male MC than Jeremy. His desperation for a cure is palpable and he is tenacious in his quest, exactly how someone so much in love would be for the one they see fading away.
You convey the depth of emotion very well in your storytelling.
My only critique is that it is in need of editing, but I know you are aware of that. There are certain phrases like “Of cause,” which should be “Of course,” and other minor things. If you get the chance you really should try and go back and edit because your story is too good to let such minor things create a distraction for your reader.
I have read all the way to the end, and I am looking forward to you updating again. Best of luck to you and for your continued success.
How I'm I to put this word, Should I say I'm rendered speechless by your review?
I can't possibly say how I feel but I must let you know that even if I'm lost for words, it won't stop me from showing my appreciation. Thank you so much, Rue, you don't know how much your words mean to me.
My books have never been critique in this way and I humbly appreciate it.
I know about the editing and the of course part, I have already taken the correction the first time you mentioned it.
I will try my best to update soon, not much chapter left anyway.
Thank you so much, Rue, I really do love you😍😘❤
Love you too 😘❤️
3 things I like:
1. Characters are interesting and have unique voices.
2. Gets into the action quickly. Immediately introduces the main concerns of the story.
3. Good emotion. You can really feel for the characters.
3 things that need improvement:
1. Wording could use some work. IE: instead of, "He was so tired", you could write, "He was exhausted". Better if you can just show it, though; "His feet dragged and his shoulders drooped as he entered. He shrugged off his coat and hung it on the hook". You have some run-on sentences, too.
2. Grammatical errors. You'll need someone to give you a thorough editing for that.
3. The pacing needs work. Events need to flow more smoothly. You'll probably catch that in your own edits.
Thanks a lot, Jessica. I really appreciate your review. It means a lot to me.
I will watch out for your corrections and input where needed. I also understand about the errors, but please don't blame me too much. English is not my first language neither is it my second though I'm trying my best to buckle up on that.
Thank you so much for pointing those out for me.
Thank you, sweety 😍💗
Well I do have a lot of good things to say about your work goodness, like it lets you dive deep into depths of emotions and uniqueness of character is always maintained as they don't share their spotlight much often, it's pace is decent and yeah imagining urself as a doctor is something we can try while reading it
However it's down points which I felt were like the passages were like really very very long which almost made me quit at times, accent is something I also was not perfectly comfortable with, it was not bad though but has much scope for improvement, lastly I felt that Jeremy being the protagonist should have got some more authority, but overall it was a romantic genre which although I don't like often, but here I would say that certainly the story is worth the time if u r a bit patient and watch it unfold in front of you.
So good job
thank you so much Atul, I appreciate a lot. Yes about the long passages, I have been corrected for that by my dear Roza Csergo sometime ago, I just haven't had enough time to edit the story yet but if you check my new ongoing books, you will see that I have already started using my corrections.
About the errors, I'm still lacking a lot in my grammar but I'm trying my best to improve that but never the less. Thank you.